Illumination (Final outcome)

Positive feedback:

Style

Use of tone

Composition

Colour (especially the red on the long strip)

Clear idea

Critical feedback:

Could have considered using physical media in outcomes more.

Simplifying the images reducing them to more basic and simple shapes.

The square doesn't link with other two, because its so light (use more colour)

Very muted and gloomy- would this stand out or be striking in an editorial context?

Could add some darker tones on the sides to create atmosphere and direct attention towards the centre.

Thoughts:

I have a mixed feeling about my final outcome this time.

Of course the process was very interesting I enjoyed it very much, but then I starting to see the problem. I finally notice my 'bad habits' which I drew too much details. I think all three drawings have this problem and the portrait one is the most serious. That idea is pretty clear and basic, but I added too much unnecessary detail onto it and it doesn't help showing the concept at all. When I realised this problem I was a bit late, so in the long strip one I tried to using less detail, but seems like I can't control myself I did it again...

I makes me frustrated, because detailing spent me quite a lot of time. I starting to ask myself what is illustration? To what extent is concise? Should I change my style to a more basic and simple look?